First off, I feel that you made a strong argument overall.
However, you need to work on following up on your opening statements and not
making so many assumptions when it comes to preferences and lifestyle. In the
opening paragraph you asked about those who want to take the “middle ground”,
but then never elaborated on what this middle ground would be. Try harder to
make sure you cover all of your points made in your thesis. Also, you tended to
make assumptions about the general public’s thoughts and actions, solely based
off of your own opinions, so try not to generalize the public in your
arguments, not everyone thinks the same way. I also don’t believe that your
argument for convenience is backed up enough by factual evidence to be valid.
You tend to be quite choppy and repetitive in your writing, work on assembling
a smoother flow to your blog post. Other than that, I think your blog is very
strong.
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